For all those whose dream is to become a famous fashion designer and go to FIT or Parson’s to get a four year degree, Mary Margaret Quadlander suggests not to “because it is a tremendous amount of money that you are going to spend to get a degree that you might never use.” Instead of going to a fancy college for numerous years, “get a degree in something significant...then go and study for one year at a fashion university.” Or go to the Austin School of Fashion Design, and learn all that is needed to know to design and start a line to marketing it.
For someone who was once prominent in the fashion design business and now owns her own fashion design school, Mary Margaret Quadlander didn’t like playing with dolls and doll clothes when she was a child.
For those who want to learn how to sew and draw fashion figures, the Austin School of Fashion Design is the place to go. After a successful career as a fashion designer for 22 years, Mary Margaret Quadlander is now teaching what she had learned.
Your first lead had really long quotes in them, and though you did relay good information through them, you might want to paraphrase in your own words with some more interesting vocabulary.
ReplyDeleteYour second lead is quite good- for some people who read about fashion this might connect with them and pull them in to the story better.
--calvin
Third is clean, but a bit too factual, not very interesting.
2nd is the best
ReplyDeleteFor all those whose dream is to become a famous fashion designer and go to FIT or Parson’s to get a four year degree, Mary Margaret Quadlander suggests not to because you might never use it. Instead, “get a degree in something significant...then go and study for one year at a fashion university.” Or go to the Austin School of Fashion Design, and learn all that is needed to know from designing a line to marketing it.
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